Review on joshua's writing assignment 2

Joshua’s essay does support the idea of not relying on climate models in climate adaptation planning. However, I feel that there are certain areas which can be further improved. In the 1st paragraph the verb ‘undisclosed’ has been utilized, which means that the public has been informed. But if we were to look at the ‘emails leaked’, he should be trying to convey that the information was not disclosed to the public, yet, it was leaked. Thus, I think he should rephrase the sentence. In the 2nd paragraph, regional forecast and precipitation forecast has been mentioned, both different ideas, I would suggest that a comma should be added before the ‘and’. In the same paragraph ‘some particles’ has been mentioned a couple of times, I suggest changing them with ‘the others’ or ‘certain particle’. For the 3rd paragraph, I feel that it should not be started with ‘nevertheless’, as there is no linkage between the previous paragraph. The 4th paragraph has mentioned the establishment of new laws, ‘ the government’ was written, ‘the’ should be removed as it is not referring to any government in particular. In addition, for the last sentence in this paragraph, food processing company, Mars was mentioned, but there is no linkage between them and the companies that bleach the law. Lastly, references were absent and citations were not done correctly.
Overall, the essay is well organised, with supporting evidences to reaffirm the thesis sentencement.

Summary on the article 'A force to fight global warming'

Governments have just realized the advantage of intact natural ecosystems on climate change. Firstly, ecosystems regulate carbon and global geochemical cycle. Secondly, it is an easy and economical option. Reducing emissions from deforestation and forest degradation (REDD) could assist developing countries to conserve their forests as well as market the stored carbon; however, we have to overcome political and economical problem such as corruption.
Besides carbon storage, ecosystems buffer natural disasters and provide alternative income and food. In addition, there are undiscovered potential such as enzymes that could decompose agricultural waste into biofuels. Both nature and people are affected by climate change; thus, we should protect biodiversity to enhance adaptive capacity.
The safeguarding of nature conservation has an additional advantage of reducing climate change; therefore, it should be included in our future’s climate-change planning. Experiences on tapping this climate services should be shared globally.